Homework: Feedback on your blog buddies essay! My Blog Buddie is Prascilla...

Prascilla..ur essay is realy good! wel done!

you showed a lot of confidence when it came to talking about the male gaze, and other theries too! for example, the effects theory..however, you could have also included the uses and gretification theory. never mind dont think i included that either :)
the essay seemed slightly rushed, because maybe you spoke a lot about the revolution will not be televised and only a bit towards the end did you speak about your revolution. never mind it was still good.

thirdly, i really like the way u included historical context, whilst talking aobut civil rights, and you mentioned that the black people were oppressed by the white people. that is a very strong point should have elaborated :)

i like that fact where you mentioned the title being repeaTed constantly. not too sure if it makes the song seem more political..but it definatly stresses a point and constantly conveys the message of the song, reinforcing the fact that the revolution wil not be televised. with thisb you could have said something like "similar to this, Sarah Jones constantly is reinforcing the idea that women are not objects of the male gaze, and they cannot jus use ur for our pleasure, and this is shown by the way she also uses the technique of constantly repeating 'your revolution will not happen between these thighs' suggesting that a guys revolution is sexual pleasures".
anyway..i beta not go on!! but overal ur work is very good! wel dun! Sonal :)